Saturday, February 20, 2010

News Story#2: Crashes

1)Crushed vehicles and broken glass filled a San Mateo parking lot due to a construction truck that crashed into a car.
The construction truck barreled down a hill and into a crowded grocery store parking lot, hitting a black sport-utility vehicle broadside. The impact dragged the SUV about 75 feet into the parking lot. Eight or nine other vehicles in the parking lot were also hit. According to San Mateo Police Captain Kevin Nguyen, the container truck “apparently had some type of mechanical failure” while it was coming down 43rd Avenue, a residential street that dead-ends in a Mollie Stone’s grocery store parking lot.
One victim, an occupant of one of the vehicles that was hit, was declared dead at the scene. A pedestrian was also hit and injured. One of the three injured people was taken to Stanford Hospital by helicopter. The other two were taken by ambulance.

2)A 24-year old San Francisco motorist drove off a 150-foot cliff, miraculously only suffering minor head injuries.
The man was driving his Mazda sedan in dense fog, heading north toward San Francisco, when he missed a turn and drove over the side of the cliff.
Luckily, the car landed on its wheels. The man was able to call 911 because he landed as safe as possible and was wearing his seatbelt.
The road was closed for two hours in both directions. Rescue crews with the California Highway Patrol and Cal Fire had trouble locating the man because of the fog. They finally reached him 45 minutes later by rappelling off the cliff. They pulled up the man in a protective cage. The man was taken to San Francisco General Hospital for observation. His only visible injury was a bump on the head, according to CHP Sgt. Trent Ross. “He did what he was supposed to do; he wore his seat belt,” said Ross, who added that if the driver hadn’t been wearing his seat belt during the accident, “there is no doubt it would have been fatal.”

1 comment:

  1. 1) Nice scene-setting lead ... but you've left out the most important part: that one person was killed and three others were injured in this crash.

    2) You've got most of the right info in your lead, but I'd include that the cliff was on Route 1 at Devil's Slide (it's a local landmark, so use it). I'd also say that he went off the cliff when he missed a turn in dense fog.

    I'd probably drop "miraculously" -- too close to offering an opinion. Ditto for "Luckily."

    Your second paragraph is too long. Break it up. Good use of the quote.

    16/20

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